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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Sir or Madam,
     I'm writing this letter to recommend myself as a qualified candidate for the job of staff member you have advised in DongFeng newspaper.
     I am sure that I am qualified for it.First,enclosed with this letter is my resume which further details my academicqualificat-ions and previous work experience.Second,my cheerful personalities is well suited to working as a staff member.Third,my hobbies include music and sports.
    I would like to meet you at your earliest convenience to discuss the possibily of work-ing at your company.Thank you for your consideration of my application.Look forward to your reply.
     Sincerely yours,
    LiMing
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：

Dear Sir or Madam,
I'm writing this letter to recommend myself as a qualified candidate for the job of （加不定冠词a）staff member you have advised in DongFeng newspaper. I am sure that I am qualified for it. First, enclosed with this letter is my resume which further details my academicqualificat-ions（qualifications） and previous work experience. Second, my cheerful personalities is well suited to working as a staff member. Third, my hobbies include music and sports.（这一句话跟申请工作好像没有太大关系）I would like to meet you at your earliest convenience to discuss the possibily（这里需要一个名词possibility）of work-ing（working）at your company. Thank you for your consideration of my application. Look（用looking，是前边省略了I’m） forward to your reply.  Sincerely yours,LiMing点评：5-6分第二段不够充实，第一段应该交代你要申请的职业，然后第二段有针对性的列举出你的优点。要有选择性的使用模板中的内容。