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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Mr. Wang:I am an university student who will graduate in July this year. The moment when I read the advertisement on newspaper that your editorial office want to employ an editor for magazine makes me very excited.If you could give me an opportunity to take the interview I would be much grateful. I have the confidence to be qualified for this job. To begin with, I am a girl whose interest is in writing and who got prizes in many composition contests. Moreover, my major is Chinese language and literature in university. For four years system study, the ability in literature has largely improved.Thanks for your time and consideration. Look forward to hearing from you soon.Yours Sincerely, Ling Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Mr. Wang:（英语中用逗号）I am an（用a，university虽然是元音字母开头的单词，但不是以元音开头的） university student who will graduate in July this year. The moment when I read the advertisement on（一般用in） newspaper that your editorial office want to employ an editor for magazine makes me very excited.（这句话句子结构混乱，结构是：the moment makes me excited，应该是这件事儿让我兴奋）If you could give me an opportunity to take the interview I would be much grateful.（这一句话应该位于最后一段，第二段主要介绍你自己） I have the confidence to be qualified for this job. To begin with, I am a girl whose interest is in writing and who got prizes in many composition contests. Moreover, my major is Chinese language and literature in university. For four years system study, the（用my比较好） ability in literature has largely improved.Thanks for your time and consideration. Look（Looking） forward to hearing from you soon.Yours Sincerely, Ling Ming点评：4-5分尽量避免在开头就出现错误。第二段的内容重新组织一下，分几条简要说明你是这个工作的有力竞争者。