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Dear Mr.Cook,
I am writing to you in the hope that I want to know whether the iPod Classic will be updated in the future? Because I learn from the famous technique blog Engadget that the iPod Classic may be pull down from the stage of iPod series.
I am 23 years old now. As a loyal consumer of your company ,I have been an Apple fans for nearly 5 years. I bought an iPod Video in 2007 and then I was totally attracted by it. The huge capacity and nice look are more than words can describe. When Steve Jobs was alive, he answered the fans that he would not stop updating the iPod Classic, but among the products which are latest released, I haven't seen the new iPod Classic. Honestly say, we the fans feel a little sad.
So I am writing to you to confirm the information about the Classic, I shall be grateful if you could give me some details.
    Yours sincerely,
   Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Mr.Cook,
I am writing to you in the hope that I want to know whether the iPod Classic will be updated in the future?（这是个陈述句，用句号） Because I learn from the famous technique blog Engadget that the iPod Classic may be pull down from the stage of iPod series.
I am 23 years old now. As a loyal consumer of your company , I have been an Apple fans for nearly 5 years. I bought an iPod Video in 2007 and then I was totally attracted by it. The huge capacity and nice look are more than words can describe. When Steve Jobs was alive, he answered the fans that he would not stop updating the iPod Classic, but among the products which are latest released, I haven't seen the new iPod Classic. Honestly say, we the fans feel a little sad.
So I am writing to you to confirm the information about the Classic, I shall be grateful if you could give me some details.
    Yours sincerely,
   Li Ming点评：5分字数超出过多。感觉你这个内容不太适合写询问信，或者说是比较难写好。