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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Sir or Madam,
     After seeing the advertisement on the newspaper, which is looking for 10 Japanese teachers, so I writing this letter in order to applying for a teacher.
     I find this job fall in with my provious training and strength. With this letter that I proved detail resume. On the one hand, I graduate from normal university. I have good skills at Japanese teaching and the ability to speaking Chinese and Japanese fluently. On the other hand, I am young and impassioned, so I also have much enthusiasm in my class.
     I wish that you give an opportunity of working there with you and other colleagues. I think the experience will be unforgettable throughout my life. I would like to express my gratitude for you kind consideration of my application. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
    Your sincerely,
    Li Ming
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam, After seeing the advertisement on the newspaper, which is looking for 10 Japanese teachers, so I writing（前边是一个介词短语，所以这里不用so，改成I’m writing） this letter in order to applying for a teacher. I find this job fall in with my provious（拼写错误）training and strength. With this letter that I proved detail resume. On the one hand, I graduate from normal university. I have good skills at Japanese teaching and the ability to speaking（这里应该用动词原形） Chinese and Japanese fluently. On the other hand, I am young and impassioned, so I also have much enthusiasm in my class. I wish that you give an opportunity of working there with you and other colleagues. I think the experience will be unforgettable throughout my life. I would like to express my gratitude for you kind consideration of my application. I look forward to hearing from you soon.Your（应该是Yours）sincerely,Li Ming点评：6分最后一段有点冗长，需要简化。是I开头的句子比较多，可以用从句、分词作定语等改善一下，要多看范文，学习好的表达。