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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Sir or Madam,
     I have been told by my friend that your company is looking for a man who has the ability as a designer.So,I write this letter to you to ask if I can own the chance.
     To begin with,my major is art design and I have get first price in a design competition which hold by the Guangdong Province.Moreover,I often pay attention to your company and know the heart of the ideal of it.As far as I am considered,your company is the right place which I can promote myself.The most importance,I think I am the person who is adequate to this job.
     I am much grateful for your time to watch my letter,and I will appreciate if I have the opportunity to work with you.
Yours,
Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam, I have been told by my friend that your company is looking for a man who has the ability as a designer. So, I write this letter to you to ask if I can own the chance.
To begin with, my major is art design and I have getfirst price（first place？） in a design competition which hold by the（去掉） Guangdong Province. Moreover, I often pay attention to your company and know the heart of the ideal of it. As far as I am considered, your company is the right place which I can promote myself. The most importance, I think I am the person who is adequate to this job. I am much grateful for your time to watch my letter, and I will appreciate if I have the opportunity to work with you.
Yours（为了更正式，加sincerely/truly等）,
Li Ming点评：6-7分第二段应该着重写你的学历和经验，最后可以一句话带过说你喜欢这家公司等内容。