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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Sir or Madam,
     I am a graduate from the Department of Chinese Language and Literature ofBeijing normalUniversity.I am writing the letter for the purpose of applying for the position of a staff which you advertised in newspaper.
     As a young man whose primary interest is in Chinese classical culture,I am sure that I am a perfect candidate for this job.First,enclosed with the letter is my resume,which details my education background.Second,not only my pervious training and strength fall in with this position,but my widely hobbies include music and computer are well suited to the position.
     If you need to know more about me,please contact me at any time,my telephone number is 1234567.I wish to meet with your convenience.Thank you for your time and consideration.
      Yours turly,
     Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a graduate from the Chinese Department of Beijing University. I am writing the letter for（应该用in，in purpose of） the purpose of applying for the position of a staff which you advertised in newspaper.  As a young man whose primary interest is in Chinese classical culture, I am sure that I am a perfect candidate for this job. First, enclosed with the letter is my resume, which details my education background. Second, not only my pervious training and strength fall in with this position, but my widely hobbies include music and computer are well suited to the position.  If you need to know more about me, please contact me at any time, （加连词and）my telephone number is 1234567.I wish to meet with（应该用介词in） your convenience. Thank you for your time and consideration.  Yours turly（拼写错误）, Li Ming点评：6分第二段内容不够充实，模板味道太浓。另外不知道你申请的什么职位，你的叙述对申请职位有什么关系。