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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear sir or madam,
     Greetings to you.I read a job advertisement from newspaper.The advertisement said you are looking for a C Language programer.I'm just hunting for a such position.That's why I write to you.
     I was graduate from university and I got a banchalor degree this July.My major is computer science. During college time,I worked for a school laborary as a C Language programer.And I passed cet-4 ,too.
     If I qualified the requirement of the job,please reply to me.Thank you for your reading.
     Sincerely
     Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear sir or madam（Sir or Madam）, Greetings to you. I read a job advertisement from（用介词in） newspaper. The advertisement said you are looking for a C Language programer（拼写错误）. I'm just hunting for a such（such a） position. That's why I write to you. I was graduate（graduated） from university and I got a banchalor（拼写错误） degree this July. My major is computer science. During college time, I worked for a school laborary（拼写错误） as a C Language programer（拼写错误）. And I passed cet-4 ,too. If I qualified the requirement of the job, please reply to（去掉，reply是个及物动词） me. Thank you for your reading. Sincerely（一般用Yours sincerely，注意后面要有逗号） Li Ming点评：5-6分第一段需要简化。第二段内容有点少，稍微展开一点，例如，取得了学位，在学校时成绩优异、本领过硬；有工作经验，并在工作过程中学到很多…