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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Sir or Madam,
     I am a senior sutdent majoring in computer science in Peking University for four years time. As I obtain the informition of employment from the Internetthat is the computer engineer ofdesigning program.
     The primary factors of competeting the position are as follows. First and formost, my major in the university is computer science so that I am proficiency in it. Secondly, I have participated inthecontest of designing program and achievedthe first reward in all competitors. Last but not least,I have a great interest and enthusiasm for designing program.
     I would like to appreciate if you will render me a chance face-to-face to talk with further details. I am looking forward to hear from you soon.
    Yours sincerely,
     Ling Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a senior sutdent（拼写错误） majoring in computer science in Peking University for four years time（去掉）. As I obtain the informition（拼写错误） of employment from the Internetthat is the computer engineer ofdesigning program. （这句话组织的不好，仔细分析的话不是一句完整的话） The primary factors of competeting（拼写错误） the position are as follows. First and formost（拼写错误）, my major in the university is computer science so that I am proficiency in it. Secondly, I have participated inthecontest of designing program and achievedthe first reward in all competitors. Last but not least,I have a great interest and enthusiasm for（改成介词in，interest in）designing program. I would like to appreciate if you will render me a chance face-to-face to talk with further details. I am looking forward to hear from you soon.Yours sincerely, Ling Ming点评：6分错误有点多，要细心，尤其是避免开头出现错误。