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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Mr Smith, I am a student who has just graduated from college in Jilin province. Lately, I heard from the advertisement in the newspaper that your magazines company needs some professional people. May be I would be the one of them. I would like to be an editor of your magazines, with due consideration the good reputation of your company and the kind environment of the work place.
    When I was a student, I was the secretary general of my academy. Every day, I have many so things to do with the massages, letters, reports and so on .And I have many rewards from composition competition. So I think I am good at writing and I will be a good editor in the foreseen time.
    I would like to express my gratitude for your time to read this letter. Here is my Tel xxxxx. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
    Yours sincerely,
    Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Mr（Mr.） Smith, （另起一段）I am a student who has just graduated from （加不定冠词a）college in Jilin province（p大写）. Lately, I heard from the advertisement in the newspaper that your magazines company needs some professional people. May be（Maybe） I would be the one of them. I would like to be an editor of your magazines, with due consideration the good reputation of your company and the kind environment of the work place. When I was a student, I was the secretary general of my academy. Every day, I have many so（so many） things to do with the massages, letters, reports and so on .And I have many rewards from composition competition. So I think I am good at writing and I will be a good editor in the foreseen time.I would like to express my gratitude for your time to read this letter. Here is my Tel xxxxx. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Li Ming（落款部分位于右下角）点评：6分第一段用两句话交代你从哪看到了招聘信息、应聘哪个职位即可。第二段需要更有条理的说明你应聘这个职位的优势。