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考研英语待批改作文：
Cover Letter
    October 19,2011
    Dear Sir or Madam,
     Having seen your job offer advertised in Chengdu Daily Paper yesterday, I would like to apply for the position and I hope I might be able to interview with your training center.
     I'm a Chemistry teacher at a middle school, I received M.A. degree of Chemical Biology last year. The job described in your newspaper seems suited to my background, and I'm confident that I would be able to perform the job to your satisfaction. I have enclosed my resume and I would be most obliged if you would give me the chance to interview your firm.
     I shall be very grateful if you will kindly let me know as soonas possible the prospect of success of my application.
    Yours sincerely,
     Li Ming
   
考研英语作文批改点评如下：

Dear Sir or Madam, Having seen your job offer advertised in Chengdu Daily Paper yesterday, I would like to apply for the position and I hope I might be able to interview with your training center（这里想要表达什么？）. I'm a Chemistry teacher at a middle school, （加连词and）I received M.A. degree of Chemical Biology last year. The job described in your newspaper seems suited to my background, and I'm confident that I would be able to perform the job to your satisfaction. I have enclosed my resume and I would be most obliged if you would give me the chance to interview your firm. I shall be very grateful if you will kindly let me know as soonas possible the prospect of success of my application.Yours sincerely, Li Ming点评：5-6分不知道你应聘的是什么职业，第二段没有介绍太多实质性的内容，而且最后一句的后半句可以去掉。