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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Sir or Madam,
     I am Li Ming, a user of your production. And this letter is written to enquire something about the further service.
     Firstly, how long do you provide the production free-technical-support? Secondly, if the machine breaks down, should I send it to the store where I bought at or some other defined office? Would you please tell me the address if it is the later. Thirdly, should I keep it far away from water?
     Thank you very much and waiting for your kindly reply in details.
     Yours sincerely,
     Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam, I am Li Ming, a user of your production. And this letter is written to enquire something about the further service.  Firstly, how long do you provide the production free-technical-support（production’s free technical support）? Secondly, if the machine breaks down, should I send it to the store where I bought at or some other defined office? Would you please tell me the address if it is the later.（这是一个问句，需要用问号）Thirdly, should I keep it far away from water?  Thank you very much and waiting for your kindly reply in details.  Yours sincerely, Li Ming（落款部分位于右下角）点评：6-7分有点过于简洁，结尾段可以加一句客套话是你的文章达到字数要求。可以加上你的联系方式。