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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir and Madam:
     I am greatful to you for reading my letter. My purpose of writing this letter is to apply for the position of software designer advertised in this morning's newspaper.
     Firstly, please allow me to introduce myself. My name is LiMing , and graduated from Industry University with my major subject is Electornics and Information Engineering. By now, I have three years work experience. Secondly, I am proficient various kinds of computer language such as C++, Java and VB. Thirdly,with my easy going charactor, I am able to complete the team work.I assume that I will be quarlified to this job.
     Thank you for your time to take a consideration for me. I look forward to your repaly.
    Yours sincerely, LiMing
    10.20.2011
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：

Dear Sir and（or） Madam:（英语中用逗号）
Firstly, please allow me to introduce myself. My name is LiMing , and graduated from Industry University with my major subject is（去掉，这句话中的谓语动词是graduated）Electornics（拼写错误） and Information Engineering. By now, I have three years work experience. Secondly, I am proficient various kinds of computer language such as C++, Java and VB. Thirdly,with my easy going charactor（拼写错误）, I am able to complete the team work.I assume that I will be quarlified （拼写错误） to this job. Thank you for your time to take a（改成and比较好） consideration for me（去掉）. I look forward to your repaly（拼写错误）.Yours sincerely, LiMing （落款部分分两行写）点评：6-7分要注意拼写和格式，不要在格式上丢分。另外表达要简洁。
I am greatful（拼写错误） to you for reading my letter. My purpose of writing this letter is to apply for the position of software designer advertised in this morning's newspaper.