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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,
    I am writing to express my interest in your recent advertised position for a resident in your hospital.
     I am sure that I amqualified for the job.Firstly,during my college time,Ialready have accumulatedlots of solid theoretical knowledge andpractical clinical skills which would make me succeed in my future career.Secondly,I have two years of work experience as a intern in Mercy West Hospital,so I really understand how a resident works and how to establish rapport with patient of all ages.Last,not only my cheerful personality is well suited to working as a staff member,but also I have the spirit of teamwork and enthusiasm about working for the hospital.
     I would like to meet with you at your earliest convenience to discuss the possibility of working in your hospital.Thank you for your consideration of my application.I look forward to hearing from you.
    YoursSincerely,
    Li Ming
   
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam,I am writing to express my interest in your recent（应该用副词recently）advertised position for a resident in your hospital. I am sure that I（加am） qualified for the job. Firstly, during my college time, Ialready have accumulatedlots of solid theoretical knowledge andpractical clinical skills which would make me succeed in my future career. Secondly, not only my cheerful personality is well suited to working as a staff member, but also I have the spirit of teamwork and enthusiasm about working for the hospital. Last, I am a very friendly person who can establish rapport quickly with patient of all ages. I would like to meet with you at your earliest convenience to discuss the possibility of working in your hospital. Thank you for your consideration of my application. I look forward to hearing from you.YoursSincerely,Li Ming点评：7-8分写的很不错，但是要注意语法问题。第二段的后两个方面都是关于personality的，其实可以把这两方面一起写，另外再加一条关于experience的。