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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,As an undergraduate student from the Shanxi University, I am writing the letter to get the opportunity to be the editor’s assistant.I have seen the Assistant Wanted from the internet. What an assistant need to dois not only to be a reminder to the editor, but also to deal with some documents. That was what I have. I used to help the professor and other teachers to prepare some documents when I wasthe presidentof the student union. Also, I can use English fluently, and have an outstanding skills at the using of the application software. Beside this, I can fix the computers. More achievements, connections and informations are included in the cover letter.Thanks for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Li Ming
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam,
As an undergraduate student from the（去掉） Shanxi University, I am writing the letter to get the opportunity to be the editor’s assistant.（这段话用的the太多了）【I have seen the Assistant Wanted from the internet（一般用on the Internet）. What an assistant need to dois not only to be a reminder to the editor, but also to deal with some documents. That was what I have.这一部分可以去掉，在下一句中用几个词表达出来】 I used to help the professor and other teachers to prepare some documents when I wasthe presidentof the student union. Also, I can use English fluently, and have an outstanding skills（单复数保持一致，前边用的an） at the（去掉） using of the application software. Beside this, I can fix the（去掉） computers. More achievements, connections and informations（拼写错误）are included in the cover letter.Thanks for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Li Ming （落款位于右下角）点评：6分表达需要简练而有条理。