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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam, I have read your advertisement in newspaper for an editor and I wish to apply for this position.I graduated from Beijing University majoring in Design Studies.Enclosed with this letter is my resume,which futher details my previous academic qualification and work experience.As a young man whose primary interest is in fashion designing,I am much be hopeful to be employed by you as an editor for your magazine Fashions.I appreciate the opportunity of working with you and other colleagues.Thank you for your time and consideration of my application.I look forward to hearing from you soon.Yours sincerely,Li Ming
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：

Dear Sir or Madam, I have read your advertisement in newspaper for an editor and I wish to apply for this position.（另起一段）I graduated from Beijing University majoring in Design Studies. Enclosed with this letter is my resume, which futher（拼写错误） details my previous academic qualification and work experience. As a young man whose primary interest is in fashion designing, I am much be（这个搭配不正确，可以直接用I hope to be） hopeful to be employed by you as an editor for your magazine Fashions. I appreciate the opportunity of working with you and other colleagues.Thank you for your time and consideration of my application. I look forward to hearing from you soon.Yours sincerely,Li Ming点评：5-6分第二段的内容不够充分，应该列出几条具体的说明你的优势。