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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear sir or madam,
    I’m writing to you in order to apply for the assistant lawyer in you law office. I got the news from your website and I think I’m the best one for this job.
    I’m confident for the job. First, I graduated last year from Southwest University of Political Science and Law. With two bachelor’s degrees in both English and law, I’m sure I can communicate in English and deal with the overseas cases. Second, as a member of Student Union, I spent a lot of time in solving defferent problems with many tough people. These experience make me good at communicate. Third, in order to rich my experience, I took some part-time jobs after class.
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
    My resume will send to you in this letter and I’m waiting for your reply. Thank you for reading .
Dear sir or madam（Sir or Madam）,I’m writing to you in order to apply for the assistant lawyer in you（用所有格your）law office. I got the news from your website and I think I’m the best（避免出现这种语气的词，要谦虚）one for this job.I’m confident for the job. First, I graduated last year from Southwest University of Political Science and Law. With two bachelor’s degrees in both English and law, I’m sure I can communicate in English and deal with the overseas cases. Second, as a member of Student Union, I spent a lot of time in solving defferent（拼写错误） problems with many tough people. These experience make me good at communicate（介词后用名词或动名词）. Third, in order to rich my experience, I took some part-time jobs after class. My resume will send（应该是被发送，用被动语态） to you in this letter and I’m waiting for your reply. Thank you for reading . 点评：7分最后一段还有提升的空间。