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考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。
考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,
     I am a senior from the Department of Business Administration. I want to apply an accounting applicant which I find from your prestigious company on the net.
     Firstly, You can see from the data sheet that is enclosed with this letter that I have had two years of varied experience in a bookstore and a market. Secondly, my cheerful personality is well to keep accounts and cooperate with colleagues. Thirdly, my hobbies include music and sports.
    Thank you for your time and consideration. If there is further information that you wish in the meantime, I will give you more details regarding my educational background and working experiences.
    Yours sincerely,
    Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a senior from the Department of Business Administration. I want to apply an accounting applicant（这是一个职业吗） which I find from your prestigious company on the net. Firstly, You（y小写） can see from the data sheet that is enclosed with this letter that I have had two years of varied experience in a bookstore and a market. Secondly, my cheerful personality is well to keep accounts and cooperate with colleagues. Thirdly, my hobbies include music and sports.（这一句话跟申请职位没有什么太大的关系）Thank you for your time and consideration. If there is further information that you wish in the meantime, I will give you more details regarding my educational background and working experiences.Yours sincerely,Li Ming点评：5-6分第二段写的不是很充分。可以说出你的几方面适合这个工作的地方，然后再说随心附上简历。