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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam，
     Your advertisement for a staff member in May 10,China daily interested me，because the position your provided there exactly like the kind of job I am seeking for.
     Accoring to your advertisement，you need a staff whois highly educated and has some relatedworking experience. I think I meet the requirements above. I graduatedfrom Shanghai University withan Master of Science degree. And I hadworked in a relevant company before. I had worked in a company for several months during college.I had learned a lot of experience at that time.What's more, I had passed CET-6, and I can communicate with the native speakers freely in English. I am a very friendly person who can quicklybuilt friendship with others of all ages.
     Thank you for your time and consideration. I am looking forward to your reply at your earliest convenience.
     Yours sincerely，
    Li Ming
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam， Your advertisement for a staff member in May 10,China daily interested me，because the position your provided there exactly like the kind of job I am seeking for. Accoring（拼写错误） to your advertisement，you need a staff whois highly educated and has some relatedworking experience. I think I meet the requirements above. I graduatedfrom ShanghaiUniversity withan Master of Science degree（一般说a master degree in science）. And I had（去掉，这里用过去时，不用过去完成时）worked in a relevantcompany before. I had worked in a company for several months during college. I had learned a lot of experience at that time. What's more, I had passed CET-6, and I can communicate with the native speakers freely in English. I am a very friendly person who can quicklybuilt friendship with others of all ages. Thank you for your time and consideration. I am looking forward to your reply at your earliest convenience.  Yours sincerely，Li Ming点评：6-7分第一段应该说明职业，以便第二段有针对性的展开。第二段写的不够有条理。例如第二部分关于experience，可以写：Besides the part-time job during college, I worked in a relevant company for xx years, and I get some valuable experience in….