考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(43)

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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am very glad to meet the news that your company is seeking employees about computer technology from news paper recently.It is a very good opportunity to me.
First of all,I have done experiment of the computer technology for five years,and Many practices help me to become a better worker.Secondly,I have not only abound knowledges,but also have a good honestness of vocation.lastly,it is possible that I afford to the work now if you can give me a chance.
I am looking forward to hearing your message. yours sincerely,
Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam, 【yours（y大写） sincerely,
Li Ming】（这一部分位于右下角，不是中间）点评：5-6分最后一段可以加一句客套的话，例如Thanks for your time and consideration.等，以至于不会显的很单薄。语言的表达能力需要加强。这种作文可以多背几个模板。
I am very glad to meet the news that your company is seeking employees about computer technology from news paper recently. It is a very good opportunity to me.
First of all, I have done experiment of the computer technology for five years, and Many（m小写） practices help me to become a better worker. Secondly, I have not only abound（abound是个动词，这里需要个形容词abundant）knowledges（拼写错误）, but also have（去掉，注意前边have位于not only之前） a good honestness（拼写错误） of vocation. lastly（l大写）, it is possible that I afford to the work now if you can give me a chance.
I am looking forward to hearing（加介词from） your message.