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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,
     My interest in the position of treasurer in your corporation has prompted me to forward to my resume for your review and consideration.
     I am convinced that I am right person for the job in that the three point as follow. Firstly, I have the certified public accountant qualification certificate and the Bachelor degree. Secondly, I have relevant work experience and the qualifications necessary to effectively handle the responsibilities of financial accounting. Lastly, my industrial attitudes of professional, rigorous and innovative could make me complete the task better which the company distribute.
     I express my devout appreciation to you for your prompt attention. I welcome the chance to meet you to further discuss my qualification and the requirement of your company. Look forward to your reply. Thank you again.
    Yours sincerely,
     Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
    Dear Sir or Madam,
My interest in the position of treasurer in your corporation has prompted me to forward to（forward作为动词讲时是及物动词，去掉to）my resume for your review and consideration.  I am convinced that I am（加定冠词the）right person for the job in that the（去掉一个） three point（应该用复数，因为是三个）as follow. Firstly, I have the certified public accountant qualification certificate and the Bachelor degree. Secondly, I have relevant work experience and the qualifications（与上面的qualifications重复，如果有不同，应该区别说明） necessary to effectively handle the responsibilities of financial accounting. Lastly, my industrial attitudes of professional, rigorous and innovative（这里应该用名词） could make me complete the task better which the company distribute.  I express my devout appreciation to you for your prompt attention. I welcome the chance to meet you to further discuss my qualification and the requirement of your company. Look forward to your reply. Thank you again. Yours sincerely,  Li Ming点评：6-7分第二段需要更加简洁明朗，即条理清晰的列出内容，同时句子要简洁。