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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,
     I’m a graduate student from Zhejiang Sci-Tech University.Through the newspeper, I got a imformation which you firm needs several desingers.I really hope to be employed by you.
     There are some reasons to indicate this job conform to me. To begin with,I like designing and study painting for ten years, so this position does fall in with my former preparation. In addition,my work awarded two designing competition last year, I believe I have the ability which you demand for this job.
     I wish to recive you reply soon. Thank you for your time and consideration.
     Sincerely,
     Li Ming
   
考研英语作文批改点评如下：

Dear Sir or Madam,
I’m a graduate student from Zhejiang Sci-Tech University(考试中不要使用省略). Through the newspeper（拼写错误）, I got a（如果要用不定冠词，要用an，建议使用定冠词the） imformation（拼写错误） which you firm needs several desingers（拼写错误）. I really hope to be employed by you. There are some reasons to indicate this job conform（这里不能用动词原形，如果是indicate后省略宾语从句的that，conform应该用第三人称单数，如果不是从句，双宾语应该用动名词形式）to me. To begin with, I like designing and study（这里应该用完成时I have studied） painting for ten years, so this position does fall in with my former preparation. In addition, my work awarded（应该用被动语态，改为was awarded by/in） two designing competition last year, I believe I have the ability which you demand for this job. I wish to recive（拼写错误） you（这里应该用所有格形式your） reply soon. Thank you for your time and consideration. 【Sincerely,（这里一般用Yours sincerely，） Li Ming】（落款部分写在文章的右下方）点评：5-6分首先是拼写错误有点多，而且是一些常见词。然后需要注意细节上的问题。第二段如果简单加一条你的personality会更好。