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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Dean:
     Iam an English teacher who has three-year teaching experience. I want to transfer your city for my career development. Today, I have read about a news of your school having a recruit in the newspaper. I found that two English teachers are needed in your school, so I think that I may be a proper person.
     Now, I introduce myself in brief. I graduated from Beijing Foreign Language University three years ago, and was allocated a middle school in a county. During my work, I have achieved a teaching certificate. I am convicted that I am able to be competent to my job. The students I taught have achieved the first place of their English grades in the whole county after the final term examination was held in this semester. As a result, I was given the prestige of the excellent teacher.
     If you are willing to interview me, I will be pleasure and make you further understand me. You can contact me at your spare time, my cell phone number 384756458. I am looking forward to an early reply.
    Yours sincerely,
    Li Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Dean:（英语中用逗号） Iam an English teacher who has three-year teaching experience. I want to transfer（加介词to） your city for my career development. Today, I have read about a（用定冠词the） news of your school having a recruit in the newspaper. I found that two English teachers are needed in your school, so I think that I may be a proper person. Now, I introduce myself in brief. I graduated from Beijing Foreign Language University three years ago, and was allocated a middle school in a county. During my work, I have achieved a teaching certificate. I am convicted that I am able to be competent to my job. The students I taught have achieved the first place of their English grades in the whole county after the final term examination was（改成that或是去掉was） held in this semester. As a result, I was given the prestige of the excellent teacher.  If you are willing to interview me, I will be pleasure（这里 需要一个形容词） and make you further understand me. You can contact me at your spare time, my cell phone number 384756458. I am looking forward to an early reply. Yours sincerely, Li Ming点评：6分表达不够简洁。注意细节。