考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(23)

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考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。
考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,
     I am writing this letter to recommend myself as an editor of your magazine Economist which advertised in the newspaper two months ago. I do wish to have the opportunity of having worked with you and your colleagues.
     As a young man whose majority is in News, I find my personally ability is well fit this job. After my graduate from Beijing University I worked for a finance company, during the two years I acquired much knowledge of economy. With the capability of writing I think I could be the right person of the position needed by you.
     I really wish to have an interview form you . You could call me at 98765 in your convenience. Thank you for your time and consideration. I am looking forward to your reply .
    Yours truly,（格式右下角左对齐）
    Li Ming
    老师辛苦您了，这是我备战考研第一次写作文....不会写太痛苦了，请教老师一个问题，考研作文老师没有偏好齐头式或者空两行的格式吧，再次感谢老师，老师我加上那几个字，署名才能在右下角，要不格式就不对了，我怎么都弄不好，只能弄成那样了
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to recommend myself as an editor of your magazine Economist which advertised in the newspaper two months ago（时间太长，两个月之前的招聘广告很有可能已经过期）. I do wish to have the opportunity of having worked（这里不用完成时，改成working） with you and your colleagues. As a young man whose majority（这个词是大多数的意思，改成major） is in（去掉） News, I find my personally ability is well fit this job. After my graduate from Beijing University I worked for a finance company,（加连词and） during the two years I acquired much knowledge of economy. With the capability of writing I think I could be the right person of the position needed by you. I really wish to have an interview form（from） you. You could call me at 98765 in your convenience. Thank you for your time and consideration. I am looking forward to your reply.Yours truly,（格式右下角左对齐）Li（不用空格） Ming点评：6分第二段的内容，去掉第一句的客套话后实际内容很少，可以把你的学历和经验分开写。另外可以写一写你的personality等内容。