考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(25)

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考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。
考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a graduate from the Chinese Department of the Tianjin University.I am writing to applying for the position of a staff which you advertised in newspaper.Enclosed with the letter is my resume.
I am sure that I am a perfect candidate for this job.I am a careful and friendly person,and my previous training and strength fall in with this position.
I wish to meet with your convenience.Thank you for your time and consideration.
    Yoursturly,
     Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Yoursturly, Li Ming （落款部分写在右下角）点评：5分。第一段的内容量与第二段的内容量形成鲜明的对比，让人觉得是时间不够仓促写出的。第一段可以简明的写出在哪里看到招聘信息然后应聘什么职位。第二段写你所学的专业、工作经验、个人性格等内容。Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a graduate from the Chinese Department of the（去掉） Tianjin University. I am writing to applying（前边的to是动词不定式，这里应该用原型） for the position of a staff which you advertised in newspaper. Enclosed with the letter is my resume.
I am sure that I am a perfect candidate for this job. I am a careful and friendly person, and my previous training and strength fall in with this position.
I wish to meet with your convenience. Thank you for your time and consideration.