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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir/Madam
    I’m writing to apply the position which is provided by your company.Yesterday,I have looked the recruit information in the newspaper and I found the job is very fall in with my previous training and strength,
    To begin with,I was graduated from Beijing**University who major in International Business Management in July 2010.Morever,from July 2010 to June 2011,I have worked in the Bank of China as a secretary to deputy manager of marketing.Inaddition,I was familiarity with Microsoft Word ,Excel and have the ability to work independently.
     Sincerely Yours,
      LiMing
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir/MadamI’m writing to apply the position which is provided by your company. Yesterday, I have looked the recruit information in the newspaper and I found the job is very fall in with my previous training and strength,To begin with, I was graduated from Beijing**University who major in International Business Management in July 2010.Morever, from July 2010 to June 2011, I have worked in the Bank of China as a secretary to deputy（这里需要一个动词） manager of marketing. Inaddition（分开In addition）, I was（应该用am，不能说是过去数量应用…） familiarity with Microsoft Word, Excel and have the ability to work independently.I really wish to gain a chance to（建议用of） interview. Thank you for your time and consideration,（加连词and） looking forward to your reply. Sincerely Yours, LiMing（落款部分要写在右下角）点评：7分写的还是不错的，不要在格式上丢分，否则太可惜了。
    I really wish to gain a chance to interview.Thank you for your time and consideration,looking forward to your reply.