考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(17)

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考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。
考研英语待批改作文：
Dear sir or madam,
     I am writing to apply for the positing of Internet administrators you advertised in yesterday's NEWORLTAL.
     To briefly introduce myself ,I am a graduate student of Inner Mongolia University of science and Technolgy majoring in computing adminitration and expect graduation this June.Not only have I excellent academic performance in all courses .I also possess the rich experience of assisting administration.My interactive personal skill and teamwork spirit are also appropriate for this post.
     I would be grateful if you could arrange an interview at your earliest convenience.
     Yours sincerely
     Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear sir or madam, I am writing to apply for the positing（position） of Internet administrators（用单数，因为你申请的是一个人的一个职位） you advertised in yesterday's NEWORLTAL. To briefly introduce myself, I am a graduate student of Inner Mongolia University of science and Technolgy（这里表达的太复杂了，去掉这一部分，或者是说XX department） majoring in computing adminitration（拼写错误，administration） and expect graduation this June. Not only have I excellent academic performance in all courses .I also possess the rich experience of assisting administration. My interactive personal skill and teamwork spirit are also appropriate for this post. I would be grateful if you could arrange an interview at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely（加逗号） Li Ming点评：7分写的还不错。需要加强语言的表达能力。