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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,
     Iam responding to your ad in the June 17th,2011,the China daily, for the position of the nutritionist .Enclosed with this letter is my resume, which further details my qualification and work experience.
     It prompts me to offer you my qualification because your requirements closely parallel my qualification and work experience. I graduated form Chemistry Department of Ji Lin University .My major is Pharmaceutical Program .I once worked as a nutritionist in a company for 2 years .I am a very friendly person who can quickly establish rapport with people of all ages. I assume that I could live on friendly terms with my cooperative partners.
     I would appreciate it if you could grant me an interview so that I could explain in more details in person the relevance of my background ang training. Thank you for your consideration of my application. I am looking forward to meeting you in the near future.
     Yours sincerely,
     Ling Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam, I am responding to your ad in the（改成on） June 17th, 2011, the（改成in） China daily, for the position of the nutritionist .Enclosed with this letter is my resume, which further details my qualification and work experience. It prompts me to offer you my qualification because your requirements closely parallel my qualification and work experience. I graduated form（from）Chemistry Department of Ji Lin（Jilin） University .My major is Pharmaceutical Program .I once worked as a nutritionist in a company for 2 years .I am a very friendly person who can quickly establish rapport with people of all ages. I assume that I could live on friendly terms with my cooperative partners.（去掉，与上一句语义重复） I would appreciate it if you could grant me an interview so that I could explain in more details in person the relevance of my background ang（and？） training. Thank you for your consideration of my application. I am looking forward to meeting you in the near future. 【Yours sincerely, Ling Ming】（落款部分位于右下角）点评：6-7分语言要简洁，言简意赅。