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发表于 2017-8-6 14:07:31 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
考研英语复习资料:考研英语作文范文批改,新东方在线考研频道编辑整理,总有一篇适用你。
考研英语待批改作文:
Dear Sir or Madam,
     I have learned from my friend Tom of your vacancy for a secretary, and am therefore writing to apply for the position.
     I am confident that my academic training has prepared me to handle this job.To begin with, I have a good command of professional knowledge and can speak English fluently. In addition, I gained much experience in my previous work. With my qualification and ability, I am convinced that I will make satisfactory contribution towards development of your company.
     I'm looking foward to an interview at your convenience. Thank you for your consideration.
     Yours Sincerely,
      Li Ming
     考研英语作文批改点评如下:
Dear Sir or Madam, I have learned from my friend Tom of your vacancy for a secretary, and (建议加I)am therefore writing to apply for the position. I am confident that my academic training has prepared me to handle this job.To begin with, I have a good command of professional knowledge and (加I)can speak English fluently. In addition, I gained much experience in my previous work. With my qualification and ability, I am convinced that I will make satisfactory contribution towards (加定冠词the)development of your company. I'm looking forward(拼写错误,forward) to an interview at your convenience. Thank you for your consideration. Yours Sincerely,  Li Ming点评:6分第二段的第二部分内容给人感觉很空旷,要让你的内容更加充实。
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