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考研英语待批改作文：
DearSirorMadam,
    IamaseniorstudentfromtheDepartmentofComputerScienceofPekingUniversity.
    Iamwritingthislettertoexpressmyfavourforthepositionasasoftwareengineer
    whichisadvertisedinyourwebsite.
    IbelievethatIwillqualifyforthejobquitewell.Ontheonehand,whatIhave
    studiedinthepastfouryearswashighlyinaccordancewiththerulesyouoffered.On
    theotherhand,Iamapersonwhoisalwaysreadytocopewiththeothersinthework
    orthedailylife.Besides,IhaveworkedasaparttimestaffintheIBM.SoIreckon
    thatmyexperiencewillassistmeadapttothenewenvironmentmorequickly.What'smore,
    enclosedwiththeletterismyresumewherefurtherdetailsofmyinformationispresented.
    Finally,itwouldbegratefulifyouaresokindastooffermethechanceofbeing
    interviewedsothatIcanfurtherexpressmyself.Iamlookingforwardtoyourreply.
    Yourssincerely,
    LiMing
   
考研英语作文批改点评如下：

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a senior student from the Department of Computer Science of Peking University. I am writing this letter to express my favour for the position as a software engineer which is advertised in（用on） your website.
I believe that I will qualify for the job quite well. On the one hand, what I have studied in the past four years was highly in accordance with the rules you offered. On the other hand, I am a person who is always ready to cope with the others in the work or the daily life. Besides, I have worked as a parttime（part-time） staff in the IBM. So I reckon that my experience will assist me adapt to the new environment more quickly. What's more, enclosed with the letter is my resume where further details of（去掉，detail是个及物动词）my informationis（拼写错误）presented（这个词用在这里想要表达什么呢？现在的信息应该是present information）.Finally,（这个词建议去掉） it would be grateful if you are so kind as to offer me the chance of being interviewed so that I can further express myself. I am looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,Li Ming点评：8-9分写的很不错！条理清楚，内容充实。注意以上几个细节性的问题。