考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(29)

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考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。
考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,
     I am a undergraduate with Department of Human Resources in ABC University. I am writing to apply for the HR assistant position which issued on your homepage.I hope that my major and experiences will qualify me for the job.
     Firstly,for the past four years I have acheived satisfactory scores in my studies and been awarded scholarships several times,and I also had past the Human resources management division examination.Secondly, with more than one year of experience working as a part-time HR assistant in D company ,I feel that I have the qualifications necessary to effectively handle the responsibilities of the position.Lastly,compared to other candidates I can speak not only English but also Japanese fluently.
I would like to express my gratitude for your attention to my resume.I look forward to hearing from you soon.
     Your's sincerly,
Li Ming
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a（应该用an） undergraduate with Department of Human Resources in ABC University. I am writing to apply for the HR assistant position which issued on your homepage. I hope that my major and experiences will qualify me for the job. Firstly, for the past four years I have acheived（拼写错误，achieved） satisfactory scores in my studies and been awarded scholarships several times, and I also had past the Human（既然后面的单词都没有大写首字母，这里也不要大写了） resources management division examination. Secondly, with more than one year of experience working as a part-time HR assistant in D company, I feel that I have the qualifications necessary to effectively handle the responsibilities of the position. Lastly, compared to other candidates（不要跟别人比较，因为你不了解别的应聘者的情况） I can speak not only English but also Japanese fluently.
I would like to express my gratitude for your attention to my resume. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Your'ssincerely（Yours sincerely）,
Li（不用空格） Ming点评：7-8分写的不错，有些地方最好能简化一点。