考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(7)

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考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。
考研英语待批改作文：
Dear sir or Madam, I have read your advertisment in the nespaper for a staff member,and should be grateful if you could consider me favorably as an applicant for this position. I am sure that I am qualified for it.First,my major is coincide with the job’s requirement.Second,my cheerful personality is well suited to having a job like this.My hobbies include sports and music,and I can play erhu. I would be appreciate if you could grant me an interview so that I could show you the detail in person about my background and training.I am looking forward to your favorable reply at your earliest convenience.   Sincerely,   Li Ming
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear sir or Madam, I have read your advertisment（拼写错误advertisement） in the nespaper（拼写错误newspaper） for a staff member, and（加主语I）should（应该用would） be grateful if you could consider me favorably as an applicant for this position. I am sure that I am qualified for it. First, my major is coincide with the job’s requirement. Second, my cheerful personality is well suited to having a job like this. My hobbies include sports and music, and I can play erhu. I would be appreciate（应该用形容词appreciated） if you could grant me an interview so that I could show you the detail in person about my background and training. I am looking forward to your favorable reply at your earliest convenience.   Sincerely（一般用Yours sincerely）,   Li Ming点评：6分第二段的内容不够充实。最好第一段写出招聘的具体职位，第二段更加有针对的推销你自己。