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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,
     I am a youngman who has just graduated from university. I went to you website and got the information that you are in need of an editor. And I would like to apply for that job which I consider I am equal to.
     I went to the sociaty for just couples of months. Although I have no that much formal working experience, however,I have been an intern for a large newspaper for nearly half of a year. And I knew what an editor should do very much. What’s more,I am a hard-working man, I would cherish every single opportunity if you are so kind to offer me.
     I would like to express my appreciation of your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
     Yous sincerely,
     Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a youngman（young man分开写） who has just graduated from university. I went to you（应该用所有格your） website and got the information that you are in need of an editor. And I would like to apply for that job which I consider I am equal to. I went to the sociaty（拼写错误society） for just couples of months.（表达比较中式化） Although I have no（应该是don’t have） that much formal working experience, however,（去掉，前边已经有although，英语中although不与but、however等连用，because不与so连用）I have been an intern for a large newspaper for nearly half of（去掉，直接用half a year就可以了） a year. And I knew what an editor should do very much. What’s more, I am a hard-working man, I would cherish every single opportunity if you are so kind to offer me. I would like to express my appreciation of your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yous（Yours） sincerely, Li Ming点评：5-6分主要问题是表达上比较中式化，同时要注意单词、词组的使用问题。