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考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,
    I am writing to enquire about the possible of a placement on the a sofeware engineer of your corporation.The news thatI heard from my friendlast week.
      I have been finish study computer software development athubei university and pursued it two years.At one time i used to worked as a group leaderin a local campany,salary iswell butfrequently overtime,i feel very tied,so i have decide to quit this job.therefore,I am available for an interview any time.
    Thank you for your considerderation of this application.I look forward to hearing from you.
    your sincerely,
    Li Ming

     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to enquire about the possible of a placement on the a（两个冠词不要同时用）sofeware（拼写错误，software） engineer of your corporation. The news thatI heard from my friendlast week.（这不是一句完整的话，要并入前一句话中）  I have been finish（改成finished，用过去分词，不用被动语态） study computer software development athubei university（学校名称属特有名次，首字母大写） and pursued it two years. At one time i（大写）used to worked as a group leaderin a local campany（拼写错误，company）, salary iswell butfrequently overtime, i（大写）feel very tied, so i（大写） have decide to quit this job. therefore（t大写）, I am available for an interview any time. Thank you for your considerderation（拼写错误，consideration） of this application. I look forward to hearing from you. your（Yours）sincerely, Li Ming点评：4-5分细节性错误和小错误比较多。第二段内容不太符合要求，要分几条写你哪里适合这项工作。注意大小写的问题。