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考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。
考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam，
     Your advertisement for a staff member in May 10,China daily interested me，because the position your provide there exactly like the kind of job I am seeking for.
     Accoring to your advertisement，you need a staff whois highly educated and has some related woking experience.I think I meet the requirements above.I graduated form ShangHai University with a M.S.degree.And I hadworked in a relevent company before.What's more,I had passed CET-6,and I can communicate with the native speaker freely in English.I am a very friendly person who can quicklybuilt friendship with others of all ages.
     Thank you for your time and consideration.I am looking forward to your reply at your earliest convenience.
     Yours sincerely
     Li Ming
   
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Sir or Madam， Your advertisement for a staff member in May 10,China daily interested me，because the position your provide（应该用过去时，因为广告已经刊登） there exactly like the kind of job I am seeking for. Accoring（拼写错误providing）to your advertisement，you need a staff whois highly educated and has some related woking（拼写错误） experience. I think I meet the requirements above. I graduated form（拼写错误） ShangHai（h不用大写） University with a（m的发音是以元音开头，所以要用an） M.S.degree（最好不要用缩写）. And I hadworked in a relevent（拼写错误，relevant）company before. （这里可以再补充以下你有经验）What's more, I had passed CET-6, and I can communicate with the native speaker（建议用复数） freely in English. I am a very friendly person who can quicklybuilt friendship with others of all ages. Thank you for your time and consideration. I am looking forward to your reply at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely（要有逗号） Li Ming（落款部分写在右下角）点评：6-7分拼写错误有点多，另外一些格式上的规则要注意。第二段的第一条内容简化一下。