考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(3)

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考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。
考研英语待批改作文：
    Dear Sir OR Madam,
    I am writing to apply for the position of software designer that you advertised in the website HR.
    I am an undergraduate of Sichuan University who major in Computer Science and Technology. The main reason I want this job is I appreciate the culture atmosphere and staff's working fervency of your company. And I have the relevant qualification and work experiences you need. Not only have I excellent academic performance, but also I possess the rich experiences of the position need. Last but not least, as a member of Student Union I have a good teamwork spirit which is indispensable in future work. For further information please refer to my attached resume. Thanks for your time, I would be much grateful if you could arrange me an interview.
    Yours sincerely,
    Li Ming
    前几天刚刚背了范文。。请老师斧批
    PS：怎么修改格式啊，我怎么改不了段落？
    PS：成功了不？
   
考研英语作文批改点评如下：

Dear Sir OR（这里的or不用大写） Madam,I am writing to apply for the position of software designer that you advertised in the website HR（尽量不要用缩写）.I am an undergraduate of Sichuan University who major in Computer Science and Technology. The main reason I want this job is I appreciate the culture atmosphere and staff's working fervency of your company. 【And I have the relevant qualification and work experiences you need. Not only have I（此处的倒装应该是do I have） excellent academic performance, but also I possess the rich experiences of the position need.】 Last but not least, as a member of Student Union I have a good teamwork spirit which is indispensable in future work. For further information please refer to my attached resume. Thanks for your time,（加连词and） I would be much grateful if you could arrange me an interview.Yours sincerely,Li Ming（这一部分写在右下角）点评：6-7分书信一般分三段写，【】部分的内容需要简化一下。写的还是不错的。