考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(13)

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考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。
考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,
     I’m writing to apply for the position of Industrial Designer which you advertised in newspapers.
     There’re a number of reasons which I can qualify for this job. The first and foremost, I major in Design in University, and I can work in it faster than others. Second, I have some years of work experience about this job. At last, I not only have the capacity of the social contact, but also have the enthusiasm about this position.
     I would appreciate it if you would send me a reply at your earliest convenience.
     Yours sincerely
     Li Ming
   
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam, I’m writing to apply for the position of Industrial Designer which you advertised in newspapers. There’re a number of reasons which I can qualify for this job. The first and foremost（因为信件本身比较简洁，不要用很多的连词）, I major in Design in University（没有说是具体的哪一所大学，不用大写首字母）, and I can work in it faster than others（最好不要这样和别人进行比较，另外你不知道别的应聘者的水平）. Second, I have some years of work experience about this job. At last, I not only have the capacity of the social contact, but also have the enthusiasm about this position. I would appreciate it if you would send me a reply at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely（加逗号） Li Ming（与上边一行不要离这么远，落款这一部分要写在右下角）点评：6-7分写的还不错的。写作内容方面需要适当调整，建议同学看一些范文。