考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(2)

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考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。
   考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,
     I aman undergraduate from the Department of business school of Zhengzhou university.I am writing to convey my interest in your recently advertised at newspaper position for a Secretary of manager.
     I believe that I have the appropriate qualifications and experience make me a suitable candidate for this post .Firstly,I graduate from zhengzhou university with a bachelors degree in business and as a president of the students union cultivate my outstanding organization capability in various practice.Secondly, In order to rich practice experience I often attend some byworks in afterclass or vacation during at the four years.Thirdly,I am a very firendly person who can working with other colleagues harmonious and have strong sense of responsibility.Finally,I can communicate with others in english fluently and familiarity with office soft.I have been passed the exam of college english test band 4 and college computer test band 4.
     Thank you for your consideration of my application at your earliest convenience. I would like to meet with you in the near future.
      Yours sincerely,
   Li Ming
     考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam,
     I aman undergraduate from the Department of business school（in Business Department）of Zhengzhou university（u大写）. I am writing to convey my interest in your recently advertised at newspaper position（advertised修饰的position，所以他们不能离得太远，改成position at the newspaper） for a Secretary of manager.
     I believe that I have the appropriate qualifications and experience make（makes，主语是experience）me a suitable candidate for this post .Firstly, I graduate（应该用过去式graduated）from zhengzhou university（首字母要大写） with a bachelors（bachelor’s） degree in business and as a president of the students union（student union） cultivate my outstanding organization capability in various practice. Secondly, In（i小写） order to rich practice experience I often attend some byworks in afterclass or vacation（after class or on vacation）during at（去掉一个介词）the four years. Thirdly, I am a very firendly（拼写错误，friendly） person who can working（情态动词后用动词原形work） with other colleagues harmonious and have strong sense of responsibility. Finally, I can communicate with others in english（English） fluently and familiarity with office soft. I have been passed the exam of college english（English） test band 4 and college computer test band 4.
     Thank you for your consideration of my application at your earliest convenience. I would like to meet with（去掉，meet是及物动词）you in the near future.
        Yours sincerely,
   Li Ming
   
点评：5-6分
     Zhengzhou University、English等一些很明显字母应该大写的地方没有大写。书信要简洁明了。另外注意一下单词拼写。