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范文一：
1998
Directions:
A.Study the following set of pictures carefully and write an essay in no less than 150 words.
B.Your essay must be written clearly on the ANSWER SHEET II.
C.Your essay should cover all the information provided and meet the requirements below:
1．Write out the messages conveyed by the cartoon.
2．Give your comments.
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各档次分数段例文
(1)
The past several years have witnessed a phenomenon that a variety of promises have been arising from all walks of life. Regretably, quite a lot of promises are sheer nonsense, just as the hen in the given cartoon commits herself to lay eggs which are round without any angles and corners and have shells, egg whites and yolks.
Odds and funny as they sound, such false promises can be seen and heard everywhere in our country. Administration departments assure to perform their tasks effectively and fairly without taking any bribes; manufacturing units guarantee to turn out products of good quality; commercial enterprises swear to provide genuine commodities and polite and enthusiastic services. Can you find anything new and substantial other than their obligations, duties and jobs in these so called promises? I guess your answer will be negative. As a matter of fact, their intention to make such commitments is nothing but to put on civilized outer clothing to please or deceive the public.
I dare say that your society is suffering corruption and cheat which are causing damage to society both materially and morally. But the hen and her like should know that by dishonest words no one can survive the intense competition under market economy system. They should remember the old saying, “Honesty is the best policy”.
(2)
Here is an interesting cartoon: With her head held high, maybe singing, a hen stands proudly in the center of the picture with a notice in hand. It says: “Firstly, I promise that the eggs I lay are absolutely round without any square corners. Secondly, they all have shells and cores.” It’s so ridiculous that we can’t help laughing. But after that there must be something left.
Recently, many promises have come up in many walks of life, especially the service departments. They promise you that they will provide you with warm smile service and good products. AT first you are moved nearly to thank them. But if you think twice, you may wonder if those should be their duties. It goes without saying that factories should produce goods of quality, department stores should serve customers politely, buses should arrive on time, and so forth, because all of these are their responsibilities. But why should they promise what are their due jobs? One reason may be that they want to correct their past mistakes under the planned economic system. Another is that they intend to improve their images and please the customers.
In my opinion, trying to be better is worth welcoming, but making empty and false promises is unacceptable. If factories, companies, stores and administrations do their jobs wee rather than talk nonsense, our society will be more prosperous.
[评分] 14分(1)(2)
[评语] 这两篇作文虽然在写法与风格上各不相同，但它们都达到了试题的要求，充分表述了漫画的内容和寓意，作出了自己的评论。内容充实，语言流畅，句式变化多样，用词较广泛，并能引用谚语格言，表明作者具有坚实的语言基础和较强的书面表达能力。
(3)
Absurd though it looks, the given cartoon has a profound meaning behind it.
As we can see from the cartoon, the hen promised that her eggs had definitely no angles and contained everything that a normal egg should have. How crazy her promise is!
Ironically, the same thing even springs up in our real world. Nowadays, making promises is prevailing among all walks of life, from factories, companies, to shops. They claim that their products or services are firstclass. When we think their words over, however, we’ll find they just promise what they should do.
In my opinion, to promise what are one’s obligations and duties is ridiculous and useless. This reflects that there still exist some dishonest behaviors in our society. These dishonest behaviors, if permitted to continue, will sure do harm to the development of our society. We should make sustained efforts to fight against so-called promises.
(4)
As is shown in the cartoon, the hen made two pieces of promises. On the one hand, she said that her eggs would be sure to be round. On the other hand, she could ensure that her eggs must have egg crust, egg while and egg yellow. According to the words given in the picture, we know that making promises is very popular among different depart-ments and organizations. But it’s clear that what they promise is nothing but their obligations or duties. This phenomena is not a good thing to our society.
There are at least two main reasons, I think, for this phenomena. In the first place, some enterprises want to pursuit fashion, but have not true promise to make, so they promised what they didn’t need to say. Secondly, it is a normal phenomena in the process of reform and open door to the world. Maybe there are some other reasons, but the mentioned above is commonly acceptable.
As far as I am concerned, I believe that this phenomena is not a good thing, but with the reform and open door policy being carried out, and with the development of our national economy, these problems will be solved step by step. I am sure my opinion is sound and well-grounded.
[评分] 11分(3)(4)
[评语] 表达了漫画所传达的信息和寓意，分析了原因，作出了评论，内容符合要求。思想表达清楚，文字连贯，句式有较多变化。有少量语言错误。
(5)
From the given picture, we can see that a hen, with her eyes looking up and her mouth proudly closed, is showing up a notice in which her two promises are made. One is that she assures that her eggs have no angles and each has shell yellow and white parts.
Although the cartoon humorous, it reflects a prevailed phenomenon in our society. It is taken for granted that an egg is round and has three parts, but the hen still writes an assurance of it. In reality, many factories and stores act just the hen’s way. Why? There are two good reasons. For one thing, making promises of one’s products or services seems popular, so no one wants to leave behind. For another, when one gives assurance, he has to stand up to checking up. Thus listing out something beyond doubt can protect him from criticism.
However, as such assurance is meaningless and useless, no consumers will be simple-headed enough to pay attention to it. The quality of products and services will not be improved as they should be. Therefore, it’s high time for us to call an end of this phenomenon.
(6)
In a cartoon, a chicken proudly promises to lay circle eggs, they contain everything they should have. You may laugh at this chicken. Well, it is your duty to lay eggs. Clear as it is, so called promises are spreading here and there. Shops and banks promise to open on time and treat consumers politely; post office promise to deliver letters in time; goverment officials promise not to receive money secretly and so on. We all know, these are basic things they should do. Why does this phenomenon take place?
First, they haven’t really formed the thought to serve people. During the past time there are not abundant goods in the market. People would not concern service quality so long as they could buy what they needed. But now there are all kinds of goods in the market. Having enough money, you can nearly buy everything. But this has not been recognized by some businessmen or they will not admit it. Second, perhaps this is the main reason. Others promise to provide better service, I should do, too. But those who have this thought would not work according to their promises.
I think businessmen should distinguish between duty and promise. If they substitute duty for promise, it will not only do harm to consumers, but themselves.
[评分] 8分(5)(6)
[评语] 内容符合试题要求，对漫画进行了描述与说明，分析出现这种现象的原因，并写出了自己的意见。思想表达基本清楚，但用词和结构上错误较多。
(7)
A hen promise her eggs must have not any sharp, and must have some common contents. Sounds odd? the cartoon does not want to scold the hen, but want to blame some trend around us. Recently, more and more company, shop even government like promising, that’s not a mistake, but some f them just promise their duty. And a part of them even do not want to do the duty they have promised. It’s wrong.
I think, everyone have some responsibility. If one only promise what it should do, none will interesting in it. In my opinion, this kind of promise is just cheating.
Everyone should do that he or she have promised, but not just their duty. We need more.
(8)
Promising is the most popular word in China now. Government and many business like to promise what they must do in service for their customs. But many things they promise are what must do naturely.
Business-man to promise wants to win the competition. Government to promise wants to promote their figure. For this purpose, they promise almost everything that you can think. But which thing is what they must promise and which thing not. For instance, a hen promise it can produce and egg which is not square and that egg has everything that it must have. But if not, is it a hen?
So we need true promising and hope those companies which like to promise to do real things.
[评分] 5分(7)(8)
[评语] 内容基本符合要求，语句尚可理解，但用词和结构上错误多，有些是基本的、严重的错误，表明作者的英语表达能力差。
(9)
It is a cartoon that a cock give a admission to others. In fact, the admission is “the eggs is the eggs”, nothing to say else. Just as the cock have done, the “admission” is used everywhere. What is that?
I see a lot of situation like this arround me. The important thing is not wether they have admission, the most important thing is what they have admission. Some admission is empty, that is something what they ought to do, not need to admission again.
(10)
The cartoon points out many companies often give their good promises for require prize of society. For example, the hen shout out: “My egg have four part---”. according to the hen, it will let everyone heard he sound.
From this, I think of that firm or company. They just like the hen. If their goods is very good. it not necessary to do that.
[评分] 2分(9)(10)
[评语] 作者力图按试题要求写作，但因英语表达能力极差，用词与结构错误多且严重，多为汉语式语句，且词不达意。字数不足。
(11)
As is known to all, It is important to be company-reform. For there are at least two reasons, the one hand, the company-reform can be getting benefit to workers. The other hand, it is a good thing for average people. Clearly, it is a thing that popular mentioned.
As popular sayings goes: “Everything has two aside.” such as the promise of company-reform.
The first place, the promise...
(12)
There are many animals in the form, they often have party each a week. This week, the dressed up to the party. When she arrived, there were a few friends, the cow, the dog, the goat. The hen was surprised and asked the cow: “Why don’t the others come?”
The cow told the hen: “The population is to advertize for themselves, So our friends, the sheep, the bird, etc. are busy with preparing advertizements for their work. I had finished. How about you?”
The hen went home and thought the question all night. The second day in the morning, she has a advertizement on her gaste: “I promise that all my eggs must be angle’s eggs, that eggs have egg-skin, egg-yellow, etc.”
Many animals saw the hen’s advertizement and they aren’t surprised at its content because their promisation are the same as the hen’s The population is promisation except the horse.
The horse shake his head: “The wrong woman sells, boast herself.”
[评分] 0分(11)(12)
[评语] (11)未按试题要求写作，完全未提所给之图，内容离题。语言混乱，字数严重不足。(12)文中虽然涉及到所给之漫画，但作者置试题要求于不顾，完全凭自己的想象编造一故事，且其主题写的是advertizements， 而非promises，不合图意，尽管语言上有可取之处，亦难给分。 |
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发表于 2017-8-5 21:43:51