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考研英语待批改作文:
Dear Sir or Madam,
   I am a youngman who has just graduated from university. I went to you website and got the information that you are in need of an editor. And I would like to apply for that job which I consider I am equal to.
   I went to the sociaty for just couples of months. Although I have no that much formal working experience, however,I have been an intern for a large newspaper for nearly half of a year. And I knew what an editor should do very much. What’s more,I am a hard-working man, I would cherish every single opportunity if you are so kind to offer me.
   I would like to express my appreciation of your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
   Yous sincerely,
   Li Ming
   
   考研英语作文批改点评如下:
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a youngman(young man分开写) who has just graduated from university. I went to you(应该用所有格your) website and got the information that you are in need of an editor. And I would like to apply for that job which I consider I am equal to. I went to the sociaty(拼写错误society) for just couples of months.(表达比较中式化) Although I have no(应该是don’t have) that much formal working experience, however,(去掉,前边已经有although,英语中although不与but、however等连用,because不与so连用)I have been an intern for a large newspaper for nearly half of(去掉,直接用half a year就可以了) a year. And I knew what an editor should do very much. What’s more, I am a hard-working man, I would cherish every single opportunity if you are so kind to offer me. I would like to express my appreciation of your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yous(Yours) sincerely, Li Ming点评:5-6分主要问题是表达上比较中式化,同时要注意单词、词组的使用问题。
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