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As is unfolded in the caricature(1), the pyramid was build(2) with on stone(3) accumulated. What is conveyed in the drawing is (4) most thought-provoking and worth discussing(5) among the general public, especially young people. The drawer aims to reveal symbolic meaning that accumulation is very important.
Why the accumulation is very important? (6) Below underway depict. In the first place, (7) experience is usually accumulation. In addition, (8) only the foundation to build the house. Last but not the least, we(9) knowledge is accumulated.
In terms of my personal experience, it is urgent and imperative to (10) take counter measures. If we don't pay attention to the accumulation of(11),we will not succeed. We should go to the media publicity accumulation. For another, each person should (12),foster a desirable life philosophy. If we can implement as the above mentioned, accumulation will be (13),more attention by the people.
(1)这篇不是漫画题材,而caricature是漫画、讽刺画的意思。
(2)被动形式错误,build过去式应为built。
(3)应为复数,stones,而且应该把介词on去掉。
(4)最高级要加the。
(5)名词词性,讨论的名词为discussion。
(6)这句话不对,一方面是语法上;另一方面是逻辑上,跟前后句内容上连接不上。
(7)表达不明确,经验是靠积累来的?这样的话应该用被动形式。
(8)不是一句话,没有谓语动词。
(9)修饰名词的应为形容词性物主代词our
(10)采取措施,take counter measures是采取对抗措施,按内容来看,这里不是采取的对抗措施。
(11)多余的介词。
(12)短语不对,完全是中式语言。
(13)attention词性不对,这里是想用被动形式,被大众所关注,应加上paid。
首段内容上比较全面,句句之间的衔接也紧凑,写到了图画本身的内容、图画暗含的意思、作者欲传达的意义;第二段内容很显单薄、句子之间欠缺逻辑、衔接不够紧凑、虽然列出了三点,但每一点都只是很草草概括一下,应该具体阐述出来,另外还需区分出图画含义与生活意义;第三段首句引出该段是要讲述措施,但内容上并不充实,尤其是第二句话是一句表述重要性的话,应该在第二段出现。
如果作文基础略差一些,需要首先保证一些简单的语法不出错,在此基础上再进行长难句的构造;还需要注意的是文章段落间的逻辑关系,以及句与句之间的衔接和逻辑。多读一些优秀范文,仿写,并多加练习,让老师帮助修改,一定会有提高的。
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