考研英语小作文批改：投诉信0-4分例文4

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    第四篇
    Dear Sir or Madam,
    I am a customer. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the poor quality of TV which I had bought in your department stores last week.
    The reason for my dissatisfaction is the worst after-sale service. In the first place, the saleswoman's attitude is bad extremely. She shouted at me rudely and refused to examine it. In addition, because my abnormal operation resulted in the television's fault, she said.Under these circumstances, I find it regretful to complaint the issue to occur any conveniences for you.
    I appreciate it very much if you could solve the problem, preferably another replace it, and I would like to have this matter settled by next week.
    Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
    Yours sincerely,
    Li Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
    Dear Sir or Madam,
    I am a customer. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the poor quality of TV which I had （删除）bought in your department stores last week.
    The reason for my dissatisfaction is the worst(改为bad 或者awful) after-sale service. In the first place, the saleswoman's attitude is bad extremely. She shouted at me rudely and refused to examine it. In addition, because my abnormal operation resulted in the television's fault, she said（这里应该再指出一个问题，而非第一个问题的论据）.Under these circumstances, I find it regretful to complaint the issue to occur any conveniences for you.(不能理解你的意思)
    I appreciate it very much if you could solve the problem, preferably another（删除） replace it（加with another one）, and I would like to have this matter settled by next week.
    Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
    Yours sincerely,
    Li Ming
    2分
    同学你好，要正确理解in the first place 和in addition 的逻辑关系，这无论是在大作文还是在小作文中都是非常重要的。此外，该段的最后一句应该写，这种情况对你造成的不便。