2011考研英语作文批改范例8

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To whom it may concern,
   
     When（用大写首字母） I know the Project Hope,I am glad to offering （be +形容词 to do ）financial aid to a child in a remote area. So I write this letter to you to find a candidate.
   
     I hope you could take my request into consideration. The child is a girl the best.(if the candidate is a girl, it will be better. )Because I think girls as a vulnerable group should be given more help.
   
     My plan is to help this child finish her studies until her college graduate(until she finishes her college).I will afford her all tuition and living expenses. Furthermore, if she has any difficult to help(difficulties), she can tell me at any time.
   
     I look forward to your reply as soon as possible.
    Yours sincerely,
    Li Ming
    点评：6-7分
文章内容和结构都符合题目要求，但是由于文中出现了些许语法方面的错误，导致文章质量下降。今后复习中一定要注意这些细节问题。加油啊。多看看范文，学习其中的技巧。
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