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Dear Bob,
     I am writing to make an apology to you for I have broken your window when I played football in you yard last week.I am so sorry that I didn't tell you the truth in the moment.
     I am indeed very sorry for what I did, but believe I have no intention to kick the football to you window. When it happened I was vastly fear and nervous so that I escaped in the fast. Please accept my apologies for my oversight and I would like to pay for it. How about I remit the money directly to your bank account?
    Once again, I am sorry for any inconvenience caused. Looking forward your reply.
    Yours sincerely,
    Li Ming
   
    考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Bob, I am writing to make an apology to you for I have broken your window when I played football in you（用your） yard last week. I am so sorry that I didn't tell you the truth in the（用that比较好） moment. I am indeed very sorry for what I did, but believe I have no intention to kick the football to you（用your） window. When it happened I was vastly fear and nervous so that I escaped in the fast. Please accept my apologies for my oversight and I would like to pay for it. How about I remit the money directly to your bank account?（这句话用在这里太生硬，可以直接去掉）Once again, I am sorry for any inconvenience caused. Looking forward （加to）your reply.Yours sincerely,Li Ming点评：7-8分整体写的很不错，注意所有格的使用。不要硬套模板。注意控制字数。