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考研英语待批改作文：

Dear Bob,
     I am writing to you to make an apology. While I was reading a passage with your electric dictionary which I borrowed yesterday, it sliped out my hand and fell down. Unfortunately , the screen is broken. I felt terribly sorry for this.
     To compensate for my careless, I will bring it to the service station to ask for a screen replacement . If it couldn’t fix well, I will buy you a new one with fashion style.
     Again, I would like to apology for any inconvenience this may have caused for you.
     Sincerely yours
     Li Ming
   
    考研英语作文批改点评如下：
   
Dear Bob,  I am writing to you to make an apology. While I was reading a passage with your electric dictionary which I borrowed yesterday, it sliped（拼写错误） out my hand and fell down. Unfortunately, the screen is（应该用过去时）broken. I felt terribly sorry for this.  To compensate for my careless, I will bring it to the service station to ask for a screen replacement . If it couldn’t fix（应该用被动语态） well, I will buy you a new one with fashion style.  Again, I would like to apology for any inconvenience this may have caused for you.  Sincerely yours（加逗号） Li Ming点评：8分写的很不错，语言很简练。要注意一下细节处。