看图作文在英语作文中是大家普遍缺乏练习的一种类型，一个提高的方式就是看范例和点评，针对其中的错误进行自我修正。
老外过春节:
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写作原文
(文章直接描述图画内容，不妥，可加一句图画类作文的开头常用句，如As is vividly depicted in the picture,等)The
black man, with a happy and delighted face(改为with a facial expression of
happiness), is spending spring festival with a Chinese family. Conspicuously, it
is a (改为an)encouraging scene relate to culture integration between China and
west(可改为the west countries), which is a(改为an) excellent offspring of new
century. Several factor(改为factors，several意为“几个”，其后名词应用复数形式) weight heavily for
this emerging trend illustrate(改为illustrated) in the picture, yet, two kernels
suspended on the top of the list which should never be overlooked. To begin
with, the Chinese economy has witnessed its unprecedented
lever(改为level,unprecedented level表示“前所未有的水平”) of growth in past 30 years, which
give an powerful impetus to the publicity of Chinese civilization. What's more,
Chinese culture, though through perpetual wars and turbulence, preserve its
vitality and glamour(改为its vitality and glamour are preserved), (加and its)
assets appreciated by most foreigners. There are encouraging parallels today, as
many westerners in one wave after another making their trip(改为trips) to China to
get panorama of Chinese heritage. From my perspective, various measures should
be made to foster this integration. Firstly, suitable atmosphere must be
created, where our culture and its counterparts can co-exist in
harmonious.,(注意标点的正确使用)by us. Secondly, the authorities ought to lunch various
publicity campaigns to make Chinese culture known to(加the) world. The cultural
thrive has loomed, and the economic prosperity will not be far away.
总体点评
整体来说，文章写得不错;但还存在个别简单的语法错误。作者在写作完之后若可以花费几分钟时间来回读文章，便会减少不必要的错误。考研作文的整体思路你已经基本掌握，后面要做的就是多积累高分佳句，为自己的文章增彩;再者，写完之后一定要认真检查，减少失分点。
参考分数(满分20分)：13
英语写作水平的提升需要不断地练习，在改正错误中不断取得进步，不怕犯错误，怕明知道犯错误却不面对。看了范文和点评，希望大家有思考，有提高。
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发表于 2016-7-11 08:46:20