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考研英语小作文求职信(8-10分)范文赏析二

  考研英语待批改作文:
  8-10分
  Dear Mr. Yu,
  I just read an advertisement in job-hunting website about recruiting some positions of your company. I would like to apply for a position as a software engineer.
  I understand it is essential to master a solid foundation for computer science. My professional skills, as described in the enclosed resume, are well suited to your requirement. I am a recent graduate of Peking University with a bachelor degree in Computer Science. In addition to having taken a broad range of courses, I served as an intern at a company where I have attained a fair knowledge and experience.
  I will be happy to meet with you at your convenience and discuss how my education and experience match. Thank you for your consideration.
  Yours sincerely,
  Li Ming
  考研英语作文批改点评如下:
  Dear Mr. Yu,
  I just read an advertisement in(改为on) job-hunting website about recruiting some positions of(改为for) your company. I would like to apply for a position as a software engineer.
  I understand it is essential to master a solid foundation for(改为of) computer science. My professional skills, as described in the enclosed resume, are well suited to your requirement. I am a recent graduate of the(删除) Peking University with a bachelor degree in Computer Science. In addition to having taken a broad range of courses, I served as an intern at a company where I have attained a fair knowledge and experience.
  I will be happy to meet with you at your convenience and discuss how my education and experience match. Thank you for your consideration.
  Yours sincerely,
  Li Ming
  8分
  同学你好,要注意控制字数,考研的时候超过20个词扣0.5分,超过50词只给1分辛苦分。标点符号与后面的单词空一格。你的作文没有大问题,但是你对介词的使用不太清楚,这说明你的语感还不太好,因此,建议你多读一些英文书籍。
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