2011考研英语作文批改范例7
Dear workers of project hope,I plan to offer financial aid to a child in a remote area. It will be very kind of you to arrange a child to me with following conditions.
I hope the child is a girl who is poverty（in poverty或者或直接变成poor）,and if she is an orphan that is proper. Besides,I hope the girl is virtuous,healthy,studious and more or less six years old.
I will offer her all the expenses of studying and living until she accomplishes her schooling and can be sef-dependence(用形容词形式).I'm very expecting you will offer the girl to me.
Best regards.
Yours sincerely,
Ling Ming
点评：9分
文章结构和内容都符合题目要求，层次清楚，是一篇好作文，但是一定要注意文中的细节问题，比如用词，词性问题，加油啊。向满分冲刺！
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