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As is vividly depicts in the drawing, two tourists are taking sightseeing on a small boat and discarding their picnic leftovers into a lake. Unfortunately, the lake is already littered and teamed with flow rubbish like plastic containers, fish-bones, banana peel, watermelon rind, bottles, tins, and so on. We are informed that “lost in the travel”.
   The purpose of the picture is to tell us that due attention has to be paid to the destruction, of tourist environment. Owing to the rapid development of technology and economy, the number of tourist attraction has obviously desolation. If we let this situation continue as it is, we do not know where scenic spots will be in the future. By that time, Our historical site will suffer a great spoliation.
   Accordingly, it is imperative for us to take effective measures. For one thing, we should appeal to the authorities to make strict laws to control tourist environment of depredation. For another, we should cultivate the awareness of people that this issue is vital to us. Only in this way, can we protect our tourist environment. Also, I assume that we human beings can surmount this difficulty, and we will have a brilliant future.
    考研英语作文批改点评如下:
   As is vividly depicts(应该用过去分词)in the drawing, two tourists are taking sightseeing on a small boat and discarding their picnic leftovers into a lake. Unfortunately, the lake is already littered and teamed with flow(应该用flowing) rubbish like plastic containers, fish-bones, banana peel, watermelon rind, bottles, tins, and so on. We are informed that “lost in the travel”.
The purpose of the picture is to tell us that due attention has to be paid to the destruction,(去掉)of tourist environment. Owing to the rapid development of technology and economy, the number of tourist attraction has obviously desolation. If we let this situation continue as it is, we do not know where scenic spots will be in the future. By that time, Our(首字母不用大写)historical site will suffer a great spoliation.
Accordingly, it is imperative for us to take effective measures. For one thing, we should appeal to the authorities to make strict laws to control tourist environment of depredation(这里的语序需要调整一下). For another, we should cultivate the awareness of people that this issue is vital to us. Only in this way, can we protect our tourist environment. Also, I assume that we human beings can surmount this difficulty, and we will have a brilliant future.点评:15-16分第二段的内容相对不是很充分。
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