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考研英语待批改作文:
Dear Bob,
   I am writing to apologize for having disturbed your life when I perform on the violin last week.I was in such a hurry that I was busy with my music program without concerning the life our neighbourhoods in our community. Had I paid more attention then,I would not have made such a bad influence. Now something must to be done to solve the problem because I have a awareness that breaking the society of harmonious. I can either on the outdoor for playing or in your time of on duty,If you do not mind,May I invite you to talk over this thing. Please let me konw which solution you perfer at your convenience. I really hope you will accept my sincere apology.
   Yours sincerely,
   Li Ming
    考研英语作文批改点评如下:
    Dear Bob,I am writing to apologize for having disturbed your life when I perform(应该用过去时) on the violin last week. I was in such a hurry that I was busy with my music program without concerning the life our neighbourhoods in our community. Had I paid more attention then, I would not have made such a bad influence. Now something must to(去掉) be done to solve the problem because I 【have a(an) awareness that breaking the society of harmonious】(这句话的意思不对,应该是感到不安). I can either on the outdoor for playing or in your time of on duty, If you do not mind, May I invite you to talk over this thing. Please let me konw(拼写错误) which solution you perfer(拼写错误) at your convenience. I really hope you will accept my sincere apology.Yours sincerely,Li Ming点评:6分要分三段。注意拼写和细节。
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