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As is subtiy portrayed in the cartoon,we can see that two toursits are traveling on the small boat while discarding their picnicing leftover into the lake which have teamed with flowing rubbish just like,fish-bones,banana skin,watermelon rind,bottles,tins,food wrappings and so on.
   The purpose of this picture to show us that due attention to be paid to the promble of tourism.As we know,as an engine of economic growth, more and more scenic spots are opeaned and flooded lot of people. The beauty nature are spoil and leaving behind Gold-knows how much trash among the travel.And our environment are suffering from the greast perssur:water is polluted,the economical system is disordered,the nature resource are used excessively.
   If we let is satuation continue we do not know where the beauty nature will be in the forthcoming future.Thus,we should do something avoid it.For one thing,we should appeal to our governments to make some strict lows and regulations control the tourism.For another ,we should enhancce the awareness of people that nature resoure are significant to us If we do that, Iassume that we will be able to overcoming this difficulty,and we will have a bright brilliant future.
    考研英语作文批改点评如下:
As is subtiy(拼写错误) portrayed in the cartoon, we can see that two toursits(拼写错误) are traveling on the small boat while discarding their picnicing(拼写错误) leftover into the lake which have teamed with flowing rubbish just like, fish-bones, banana skin, watermelon rind, bottles, tins, food wrappings and so on. The purpose of this picture(加is) to show us that due attention to(改成should比较好) be paid to the promble(拼写错误) of tourism(不应该是旅游,应该是旅游景点的保护). As we know, as an engine of economic growth, more and more scenic spots are opeaned(拼写错误) and flooded(加介词with)lot(lots) of people. The beauty nature are(保持主谓一致)spoil(用过去分词,这里是被动语态) and leaving(它的逻辑主语应该是人,而前面的主语是景色) behind Gold-knows how much trash among the travel. And our environment are(保持主谓一致) suffering from the greast(拼写错误) perssur(拼写错误): water is polluted, the economical system is disordered,(加连词and) the nature resource(用复数) are used excessively. If we let is(去掉)satuation(拼写错误) continue we do not know where the beauty nature will be in the forthcoming future. Thus, we should do something avoid it. For one thing, we should appeal to our governments to make some strict lows(laws) and regulations(加不定式to) control the tourism. For another ,we should enhancce(拼写错误) the awareness of people that nature resoure(拼写错误) are significant to us If(if) we do that, I assume that we will be able to overcoming this difficulty, and we will have a bright brilliant future.点评:12分最后一段没有扣题,给人感觉是跑题了。要记住是保护景区,不只是保护环境。
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